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19 February 2006 @ 09:29 am
Draco/Hermione : The Drowned Must Wear Such Smiles  
This is for the incomparable x_ning, who requested D/Hr from me :D! This took a bit of a different direction from what I intended, but I hope it fits your requirements. It's not as dark as I would have liked, I'm a bit rusty at the dark <3

Title: The Drowned Must Wear Such Smiles
Length: 250 words
Fandom: Harry Potter
Disclaimer: This story is based on characters and situations created and owned by JK Rowling, various publishers including but not limited to Bloomsbury Books, Scholastic Books and Raincoast Books, and Warner Bros., Inc. No money is being made and no copyright or trademark infringement is intended.
Pairing: Draco/Hermione
Rating: PG (verging on dark themes)
Summary: He is nothing and he knows this because she will never let him forget it. This is vengeance, such as he has never seen.
A/N: The title of this piece is a wonderful line from a poem by David Malouf (I can’t quite remember the name of the poem) and the nursery rhyme sprinkled throughout is Come to the Window. Beta’d by the fan-fucking-tastic derryere and sexxxxxy tumbledstars who are just so incredible ♥ Any other mistakes in this are my own :D

Tabby darling, I hope you enjoy it! <3

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The Drowned Must Wear Such Smiles


He sits with his hands in his lap, fingers grappling with sea salt and sand, squinting at the ghost of a girl who knew the world: a different plane, an unintelligible way. She dances, with grit and mayhem beneath her toes, a sublime thing of tarnished virtue and dirt befoul.

He is shivering, from the roots of his flaxen hair to the tips of his pale toes and the hollow, throaty winds chant: Come to the window my baby, with me.

And look at the stars that shine on the sea.

They will not be forgiven.

~*~


She teases him upon the shore with her otherworldly ways and an impish sway of her corporeal hips, and sometimes she can almost see the reticent fear reflected in his eyes. So she claps her hands to an unheard of beat, a scintillating blend of spindrift and rhyme and bone, and he draws his cloak tighter around his frame, blowing upon his knuckles rigid with cold.

She is smiling, with the translucent skin of her skull pulled taut and her teeth bared, as his eyes widen and she inhales, the words drifting from her wispy tongue: There are two little stars that play Bo-Peep.

With two little fish far down in the deep.

Everything falls - eventually.

~*~


He watches the waves tumble, beholds the tides surge with grains of upheaval and the sands of time. It scares him for he is neither pillar of strength nor symbol of madness.

He is nothing and he knows this because she will never let him forget it. This is vengeance, such as he has never seen.

He has washed his mouth until he has become benumbed; he has frenetically scraped his skin red and raw; he has dug and dug and dug, burying everything that they ever had in her hallowed, shallow grave.

And when he wakes, he wakes with the taste of ocean spray fresh on his lips; stirs to find the dreaded sprinkling of powdered shell gracing his limbs; rouses to discover her wedding invitations and his photographs and their memoirs canopied upon his ceiling and plastered against his four walls.

She lingers; she refuses to leave. It is putrid and vile and cloying and his efforts have been in vain.

Hermione is the first thing he hears when he rises in the morning - a prickling cockcrow of dawn, a pitter-patter of nymphlike feet dancing across the floorboards. Hermione is the last thing he listens to before he drifts off to sleep – a raspy lullaby from the shadows, a quiet lilt of laughter from behind the drapery.

Her voice spurns dreams, welcoming sin: And two little frogs cry “Neap, neap, neap.”

I see a dear baby that should be asleep.

He will never be alone.
 
 
 
ning.: happyx_ning on February 18th, 2006 10:54 pm (UTC)
*iz in luv*
ADFLKJAKLS;JGHASDLJF KEYBOARD SMASH!

I just went back and checked over what I requested, and GOD, this is beautiful. I love it, I love it, I love it!

While not as dark as I think I would have imagined it, your use of words and italics really brought how haunted Malfoy will always be. And I love it, since on the surface it doesn't seem so bad, but reading between the lines, reading into it all, powerful stuff, Ish, waaaaaay powerful.

The only thing that I'm going to critique on is your use of the quotes. It just seems out of place. I know, it's something really small, but juuust wanted to mention that. Also, the period should be inside the quotes, I believe.

Memorying! (since I finally know how to do it.)

>!!!!
miss lonelyheartsleanansidhe6 on February 18th, 2006 10:58 pm (UTC)
I'm not completely sure, but I actually think the punctuation inside the quotes is a regional thing. The U.S. puts punctuation inside, Britain and Australia put it outside.
arachnophobic;: { coldplay ; bones sinking like stones }ishibishispider on February 18th, 2006 11:09 pm (UTC)
I never knew that about the regional thing :O! It might apply, I'm not sure, but I've always known the period to be placed inside?

I will go research that now :D

HI YOU ♥
miss lonelyheartsleanansidhe6 on February 19th, 2006 04:23 pm (UTC)
It might be a thing where Megan is completely wrong and doesn't know what she's talking about. :D


I only remember that in one of my English papers, I put all the punctuation outside the quotation marks and my teacher said NO! YOU ARE AN AMERICAN PUT THEM INSIDE, IF YOU WERE A BRIT WE'D ALLOW YOU TO DO THE OPPOSITE. Either my teacher was troubled or I just made that up as comfort that my grammar skills were not, at least *internationally* abysmal.

Okay, now back from some quick net research and I'd say that punctuation always goes inside. Sorry for any confusion I've generated.
miss lonelyhearts: the golden meanleanansidhe6 on February 19th, 2006 04:30 pm (UTC)
Well except I found this, ohtheconfusion: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Quotation_mark#Punctuation
ning.x_ning on February 19th, 2006 01:42 am (UTC)
Really? Hmm, I never knew that. Any specific reason why? Just curious =)
miss lonelyheartsleanansidhe6 on February 19th, 2006 04:30 pm (UTC)
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Quotation_mark#Punctuation says British English has punctuation outside, American English has punctuation inside. The article doesn't mention the Australian/Canadian/other conventions - perhaps we can take it upon ourselves to classify them under either B.E. or A.E.

I have nooooo idea why. Personally, I think it is just another ploy to confuse everyone. Hmm yes, that must be it.
ning.x_ning on February 19th, 2006 06:06 pm (UTC)
Personally, I think it is just another ploy to confuse everyone.
I'm going to have to agree with you on that one, hahaha.
arachnophobic;: { draco/hermione ; nobody knows it }ishibishispider on February 18th, 2006 11:07 pm (UTC)
Re: *iz in luv*
Sskhk! Oh you! ♥

I am so relieved you liked it sdkjsdfkghdgf. I WAS SO NERVOUS ABOUT POSTING THIS sdfkgjsdfk I WAS FREAKING OUT TO HELEEN ABOUT IT. Ssdfkhjsk.

I actually wrote you two fics :D! A short one (this one) and a longer one (which I am still working on) and that is a great deal darker than this one. Ssdfjkghsk, the prompt you gave me was too good to pass up another go at ♥

The only thing that I'm going to critique on is your use of the quotes. It just seems out of place. I know, it's something really small, but juuust wanted to mention that. Also, the period should be inside the quotes, I believe.

I fixed up the period! My bad completely :D. With the quotes, I thought they were somewhat applicable because there was that constant notion of the sea in it and the nursery rhyme-ish intended to creep people out, but those lines probably weren't as effective as I thought :P. I'll chalk it down as a lesson learnt! *schnuggles*

Yaaaaaaay! Memorying! Thanks for reading bubs ♥
ning.x_ning on February 19th, 2006 01:41 am (UTC)
Re: *iz in luv*
Oh, man, I forgot to mention that too! (Besides the fact of me scoffing at you; uh, DUH, of course I love anything you write!) The rhyme at the last two lines were amazing. Totally creepy and it was just -- guh, I LOVE that.

I'm so excited to read the longer one! Weee~

And you just get better and better, m'love ♥
{oh these tumbled stars}: ; there is only youtumbledstars on February 19th, 2006 12:31 am (UTC)
I am in awe and wonder and always-present stupor when it comes to your writing. It's just so fresh. Loved the images of sea you created... I felt I could taste the salt and hear Hermione's voice riding the waves. ILU OKAYS?!
arachnophobic;: { alex/izzie ; who's to say? }ishibishispider on February 20th, 2006 03:29 am (UTC)
Ssdfkghsdk you are so wonderful to me. I adore you! I'm so glad you liked this :D

ILUALWAYSFOO' ♥
dwight, you ignorant slut: HP: where we belong.andshehopes on February 19th, 2006 01:03 am (UTC)
mehh. love it, love it. the imagery was amazing and these lines, He is nothing and he knows this because she will never let him forget it. This is vengeance, such as he has never seen. caught my heart in my throat. amazing. just, really amazing. ♥
arachnophobic;: { draco/hermione ; the finest game }ishibishispider on February 20th, 2006 03:30 am (UTC)
Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked it ♥

Those lines were my favourite from the piece ;)
wevvleswevvles on February 19th, 2006 10:39 am (UTC)
oh wow. just wow.

=> nonverbal.
arachnophobic;: { cintia ; painting charcoal faces }ishibishispider on February 20th, 2006 03:30 am (UTC)
Ssdfjkghsdf! Hi you ♥

Aw, thank you! I'm honoured you liked it :D
paper/snow/silver/goldjeauexe on February 20th, 2006 12:17 pm (UTC)
Skjghdjshfkhslhlhsklhks!

Wheeee~ Sho coolimo and angsty and... o.o

*speechless* =D
arachnophobic;: { kate moss ; beauty in season }ishibishispider on March 14th, 2006 03:37 am (UTC)
Aw! Thanks bubs ♥
"I'm going to fuck you like a wrecking ball!!": hp_dhr_everythingpumahmistress on March 17th, 2006 11:47 am (UTC)
This was a pure and gorgeous visual orgasm<3<3<3<3 LOVELY flow of words.
paper/snow/silver/goldjeauexe on April 5th, 2006 10:40 am (UTC)
it's called At my Grandmother's


xDD I have no life.